CW+Better+Writing


 * Better Writing: Why Nouns and Verbs Are Your Friends**

Better writing is often simply a matter of using strong nouns and verbs rather than adjectives and adverbs to create stronger prose. Here's an explanation of how to use this key writing tip to create fiction that jumps off the page. "The wearily handsome, nervous, stubble-chinned man slowly and carefully got out of bed when he heard the soft, mysterious sound of footsteps in his apartment."

OR

"The ex-con bolted up, rubbed his eyes and then the stubble on his chin, and crept out of bed. Those footsteps didn’t belong in his apartment.

Look at the above sentences, and see if you can figure out why the second is an example of better writing than the first. If you still don’t know, look above that. At the risk of stating the obvious, here's a key to better writing you should always keep in mind: nouns and verbs are the backbone of any sentence, and thus of all writing. I could have made this article's title really long and added "… and Adjectives and Adverbs Are Your Enemies," but that would be hypocritical, since most of my writing tips stem from the credo that better writing is concise writing.

Better writing isn't only about eliminating adjectives and adverbs so that your writing contains fewer words that aren’t nouns and verbs. After all, if we did that to the first example, we’d be left with:

"The man got out of bed when he heard the sound of footsteps in his apartment."

Not very exciting, is it? That’s why it’s important to focus your writing not only on nouns and verbs, but on interesting nouns and verbs. I began my second example with "The ex-con," but of course, I’m inventing a sentence that has no manuscript surrounding it--no context. If we’ve already met the character, use his name or a more descriptive noun such as mine. If you’re introducing a new character, use the best noun possible. "The businessman" would evoke a completely different image in your readers’ minds, and it would be a stronger image than "The blond, well-groomed, middle-aged man."

Why is one noun stronger than three adjectives (and one verb stronger than three adverbs)? Sure, we can picture a guy who’s blond, well-groomed, and middle-aged, and we might guess from that description that he’s a businessman. We can picture a "wearily handsome, nervous, stubble-chinned man" and perhaps guess that he’s an ex-con. But using the noun rather than a string of adjectives leads to better writing in two ways: First, it adds action to the character’s description. "Ex-con" not only calls forth a set of physical attributes but also, by definition, tells you something about the guy’s life outside of this moment: he’s trying to recover from his time in the slammer and go straight. A "businessman" probably looks a certain way, and presumably spends his days doing business.

Then again, maybe the guy isn’t trying to go straight. Maybe he wants to return to a life of crime. Which brings me to the second way this will lead to better writing: involving the reader’s mind in the storytelling. If you string together a list of adjectives, you’re feeding a character to your readers without allowing them to draw their own pictures. Part of the fun--and the fascination--of fiction is the fact that everyone who turns the final page of a book has read a different one. And the more you allow people to be cocreators of your characters, your settings, etc., the more enveloped in your novel’s fictional world they will become, and the better writing you'll produce.

Or in your nonfiction book’s world--nonfiction writers must leave less to the reader’s imagination, but editing using this principle will make nonfiction stronger as well. As with any other tips for better writing, customize it to your work. It’s also, as I mentioned, about brevity. I don’t need to explain why "crept out of bed" beats "slowly and carefully got out of bed."

Of course, adjectives and adverbs have their places. Otherwise languages wouldn’t contain so many. You might even find a few in this article (only a few). Again, customize this editing technique to your work to result in better writing. Read a few pages and see if you find yourself using dull nouns such as "man" or "thing" a lot--chances are they’re surrounded by adjectives. If not, the potential book sitting in front of you may be dull indeed. Don’t go crazy with your thesaurus looking for obscure nouns to replace "man," but do use this technique as a way to vary word choice--always a key to better writing. And, if you don’t have a thesaurus, for god’s sake, get one. The thesaurus in Microsoft Word, or anywhere online, won’t hold a candle to the old-fashioned bound kind.

Replace adjectives with more interesting, descriptive nouns, and watch your writing become streamlined, subtly evocative, laced with intrigue, varied in word choice… Oops, those are all adjective phrases. Just think of this noun: "bestseller."

You can read more about better writing and the book business, as well as do wriring exercises and other fun stuff, at my website, BeYourOwnEditor.com. Happy writing! By Lisa Silverman Published: 10/30/2006